Kyle Palmer is a bitter bitter child
I believe that the below six reasons should give you some
thoughts on changing my grade. As to my use of pathos, it is deserved, due to
previous inflexibilities I’ve felt slighted, and have done my best to restrain
myself.
Due to the below six reasons I believe you should change my
grade from a B- to an A-
1: There are 5 sources in my speech, unless you can't
remember, you brought up that I only had three, and I said, no, I used Supreme
Court Opinions (you reasoning used to enforce Brown v. BOE), and the class flat
out disagreed with you on your thinking that they weren't sources (which they
are, in fact I'm probably one of the few people to use Primary sources, which
they also are, rather than statistics generated by a random newspaper
editorialist.) The fact that this was pointedly expressed to you by the entire
class, yet you still did not change your sources checklist, to me, shows
incredible irresponsibility on the part of a teacher who I depend on for a
grade. Have you done this to other people?
2. You said:
"Positive Feedback:
Got the audience to take notice with your convictions-this
is an appropriate way to elicit emotion (Pathos)
Suggestions for Improvement:
Work to elicit emotion from audience in final speech
(pathos)-this proof adds strength to your arguments."
Do you copy paste analysis of speeches? Do you fully read
what you give your students?
3. Did you even look at Sarah's or Zeke's review of my
speech? I thought I did very well, and so did they. They even counter what you
say I didn't do in my speech, by saying I did:
Your comment:
Incorporate at least one stylistic device (metaphor, simile,
anaphora, etc.) again in next speech to boost persuasive value of speech.
Listeners will remember creative use of language.
Zeke Dombrowski said, under Metaphors:
“Enron accounting well done”
Sarah Moskonas said (although I’ll note it wasn’t under
metaphors, but they are metaphors none the less):
“Enron was good example, very creative”
“Nice Enron Comparison” (circled)
“wow! Powerful assertion! 1 person in WY=3.6 in CA
Crazy-> Good argument.
If you look at my speech, it even writes out the metaphor:
Why listen to small states? They are unsuccessful at
attracting residents, would you listen to Enron on how to successfully conduct
accounting?
As far as a creative use of language, I virtually created
the word “Wyomite” it’s on my speech card, and it was discussed in class as
humorous, and memorable.
4. You say:
“Statistics can be very powerful-at times sheer amount of
numbers you were throwing out at us became overwhelming”
Come on, you are a college TA, you are in grad school, my
audience is in college, I’m not lecturing first graders here. I deal with much
tougher stuff in any of my classes this semester, and so do most of my
classmates. None of them complained about the numbers issue in class or in
their personal reviews.
On top of that, the numbers were just there to validate my
overall statement between the values of Wisconsin,
California, and Wyoming voters.
5. You say:
“Adaptation was evident in the opening and closing, but was
not carried through in body of speech. Who is your rhetorical audience? It will
help in connection w/listeners if this is made clearer”
Ok, were you there? Did you read the speech cards? The
outline? Wisconsin was mentioned in my first
point (all the people in the class were from Wisconsin),
the United States
constitution and the Founding Fathers were mentioned in the third point (to my
knowledge, the people in the class were all U.S. citizens). The idea that I
have to explain how voting tabulation relates to people insults the
intelligence of everyone in the classroom. As I remember, someone even brought
up how they weren’t sure about my adaptation, as originally it related to
voters alone, but then, once I brought in Wisconsin, they knew that that was my
adaptation.
6. Don’t patronize my work with a hard worker sticker when
you give me a B-, a B- is worth next to nothing in my book. This was the most
offensive thing you could have done.
As you can see, I am none-to-pleased with your performance
recognizing a good speech. I believe that the above six reasons should give you
some thoughts on changing my grade. As to my use of pathos, it is deserved, due
to previous inflexibilities I’ve felt slighted, and have done my best to
restrain myself.
Due to the above six reasons I believe you should change my
grade from a B- to an A-
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