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Original: 1/7/2007 10:04 PM
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Sunday, January 07, 2007

Bitter Cost

 

A perfect blanket of snow,

A full moon night,

The stars as beacons to my soul.

Ethereal beauty in the dancing trees.

My breath comes in gasps,

My heart races,

My body burns.

I run and run,

The bitter cold my sole companion.

The fear biting at my heels,

Forcing me on,

Icy tears forgotten.

My cheeks are numb,

My spirit broken,

I can’t feel them fall.

The snow is deep,

The path is hidden,

The night is death.

But on and on

I run and run.

The reason why left far behind,

The choice to stop,

Just out of reach.

Always, just out of reach.

This is the cost,

I realize,

To just survive.

To just exist.

 

 

 

A/N:  I've seem to become nocturnal these days... I wrote this really late last night.  Well, early this morning I guess.  Please, let me know what you think.

 Posted 1/7/2007 10:04 PM - 14 views - 3 comments

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interesting, reminds me of the short story I once wrote concerning the person trying to outrun his nightmares, which became physical (wolves) that chased him down and devoured his living flesh.

I write my best stuff late at night/early in the morning when all the world's asleep. My short stories usually are posted at http://www.xanga.com/ZEBRA_SLUT

Posted 4/17/2007 7:04 PM by Skepticism_Is_A_Good_Thing - reply

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I really like the parallelism you have in this.

My favorite Part: The snow is deep,/The path is hidden,/The night is death.

Maybe stanzas or different formatting, because the current one feels strange (but that could just be me). Maybe a little bit more lyrical on some parts?

Much better than any of my writing. :).

-Anna.
Posted 4/17/2007 8:05 PM by StorybookAuthor Xanga True Member - reply

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I love your words so much; simple but powerful words.
BTW thanks for visiting my page. =)
Posted 4/17/2007 8:15 PM by penguin026 - reply


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