Give Me Feed Back Y'allOK so now I'm back in my old high school teaching poetry N doin' my thang. Y'all should C it my lil' Grunts R all growing up N Bcuming some fine Spoken Word Artists. i think thats how U spell artists. Any way here's one of my newer joints can somebody give me feed back on it. This way I can fix it B4 I commit it 2 memory. By the way it was inspired by a Black Ice poem that was dedicated to 2 Pac.
What U got in Ur pocket boy?
Put away that Rocket Boy
What U thinking?
Revolution?
Trying 2 swim
But U sinking
Wit’ out a solution
Stop blinking’
Cuz U missing’ the message
U know something's wrong when Ur afraid of Ur own confessions
I know U hear me
But R U listening
I’m trying 2 give U a lesson
Cuz It’s needed
In times we all get heated
But all this bleeding’
Doesn’t make any sense
Since my transition
I learn 2 listen
So now I know what 2 say
So I gotta speak 2 U like 2morrow haven’t promised after 2day
So I’m going say what I got to
And nothing going to stand in my way
Ur distant
Ur cold
I’m tired of seeing the ice in Ur eyes
Cuz U R definitely more than another gangsta
Ur my Brother
My brother
I hung with U on the block
My best friend
Together we ran from the cops
My son
2 keep U from harm
At any alarms
I cradle U in my arms
Like a father
U taught me so much
C we connected even though we’ve never been close enough 2 touch
We sit in the same seats on the bus
We come from the same hood
Everyone already assumes we’re no good
So why prove them right
When we could B the stars that shine in the night
Why walk with guns
When we could walk like we light in the sun
I am not here to criticize
I’m no John Rocket
I remember the Public Aid hell sent doctors
Holes in every pair of boxers
I’m Mexican so it was either Gang Banging or soccer
And the constant sound of fuckin’ helicopters
So believe me
Once we’re focus can’t anybody stop us
So many tried to warn U
But Ur brain still shook like maracas
Pac you aren’t gotta come back
I got this
Watch as I step on stage and Burn this
Down
Like my name is Julia Burgess now
I gotta step up and speak righteous
You’re out your mind if you ever try to fight this |