ok well considering this is a writing page type thing, i need help from who ever is willing to. ok so my mom's work has this like talent thing that supports the arts or something...and like the kids of people who work there are either supposed to submit writings or paintings...stuff like that. and if you win it can raise money for the art programs in your county. sooo yea....i really HATE like EVERYTHING i write, so i need you guys to tell me what you think of this... and like if you don't like it, then tell me because i don't want to look stupid submitting something that sucks. and like...i dunno this is like the worst thing i have ever written. the only reason i am even thinking about putting it in the competition is just because my little sister likes it. :-/
POEM: (not good!)
TITLE: Here'e Where My Heart Is
it's so easy to say this to you...
broken pieces of fear that was of losing it but i lost it that day that you left me left me with only irony
holding on to something made from nothing but white lies, and masked dreams and what happens, what happens when they vanish?
i break and then what? can we start over from here? is that safe? and is safety only a fear? of losing it, losing what i never had...?
contain myself here in this box too scared to venture back out there
and we were so perfect without ever being there so close to perfect one touch and i'll lose it but please let's jsut reach out again?
because riding on fears, i can no longer do and that thing called love, is reserved just for you so hold on and please don't let go
for, my heart just can't take it my lungs just can't make it how do i breathe without you? i know i can't live without you?
my fear has grown now but this time i can't blame it on us ...whatever "us" is? this time i won't blame it on us
so here's where my heart is empty without reason desperate and clutching so dearly to yours
and it's not easy to say this to you...
ok blahhhhhh........i know that sucks. :-/ ick. but yea just tell me what you think. and i guess mostly i'm talking to kendall because she is like my only friend who likes to write. but i mean if you guys have any advise, then that works too!! ugh....i HATE my writing.
but i LOVE you all!
x0Xo
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