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Original: 5/7/2005 1:11 PM
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Saturday, May 07, 2005
 

The rain
its a lovely lady
shaking her hips.
With a forked tongue full of free
associations or
sexual innuendos.
With
a sense of clarity amid her hazy
sea of droplets or
a sense of charity
to starving farmers,
thirsty animals.

Our lady might come to you quietly
to trace her name in your palm
and trickle away
(like lovers past).

She dies like all of us
some times slowly
others, abruptly;
leaving behind
puddles in which we can see our
own reflections
in the memory of her.
Just like us.
Leaving behind
worms and odors but
sometimes a rainbow.

 Posted 5/7/2005 1:11 PM - 5 comments

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sup did you write this? its really lovely!
Posted 5/7/2005 4:26 PM by xxxinfectmexxx - reply

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I absolutely love your writing.

by the way, I don't eat animals either.

Animals need respect too. I think.

ta-ta luv.

Posted 5/7/2005 5:31 PM by XsEnsZFaiLdX - reply

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i love the way you structured this.  very open.  i really love that first stanza.  that's awesome.  :)  anywayz...the poem is pretty great.

Later.

Posted 5/9/2005 12:28 PM by crashesthewho - reply

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Leaving behind
worms and odors but
sometimes a rainbow. = rocking ending.
Posted 5/12/2005 12:47 AM by technocolorfille - reply

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i have a feeling i'm an addict in the making - this was perfect, really. the structure was flawless and appropriate and the language almost had a grey pitter-patter sound.
Posted 6/1/2005 12:01 PM by airglow - reply


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